The lions Awesomest Day in his life sqence.

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The lions Awesomest Day in his life

It was a very hot day in December. I was sunbathing, in the sun and we saw a whole herd of buffalos, coming along the “ Savannah in Africa ” desert. At the start I started chasing the little buffalo, because it was, to weak and very slow, like it couldn’t, run or it hurt itself, and it couldn’t run, that fast like some, of the other bigger, buffalos and lions. I had lost my yummiest lunch, in the history.

I had enough of chasing the little buffalo, because we were tired, and sleepy, like we could just full asleep, on the desert of Savannah in Africa, and not wake up, it’s nighttime.,we might not have to wake up in savannah,in africa because it’s going, to turn nighttime and it might ,turn dark but I’m still too, tired to wake up. Because we are very sleepy.

We took the baby buffalo to the pond, and we were chewing it for our feast for dinner, and it didn’t want to die it was still, alive at the time that we took, it and we dug our  claws, in it’s body and then the, crocodile came and we played lion and crocodiles war of fighting, we didn’t share the baby buffalo, because it was our feast for dinner, and we were starving to eat him all up.

But we couldn’t eat, it because the herd of buffalos,came and saw us, they were near and they scared, us away from chewing, on the baby buffalo, and it didn’t die it got, away because the huge buffalo’s, came to save their little baby buffalo.

Some of the lion stayed, and the rest left because, they didn’t want to get hurt.

 And we played tug a war with him, we were trying to, chew him all up so  we can have our dinner, and then we  chopped him up,and eat him all up, because we were hungry, at the time that you caught him, we were ready to eat him up for dinner.

But then his parents came and got him, to take him home and leave, him there.

Self comment: That would of been, a yummy dinner if, his parent didn’t come and save him, and they, “called the baby buffalo to tell him get over here!!!

Self Comment: The part that I like is when I said the baby buffalo was for our feast for dinner.