I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Abbagale, this is incredible. This is really insightful (if you're not sure what that means, Google it). I really love these lines: - We had no clue of what we should have done. So we didn’t do anything - and realised there were no sounds at all and it was just the sound of knowledge. This is a really powerful piece of writing - did you get some help with this? I need you to fix a small mistake in the second-last line - it should say: So I just wondered what I'll do. Great work Abbagale. - Mr Mitchell
Abbagale You have given me an O..M..G.. moment.. this is really really really good. I do quite a bit of creative writing myself, have studied it at Uni etc... your stuff here is really good.. I enjoyed it.. thank you for sharing it with me, and well done!!! Kia tau te mauri
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Abbagale, this is incredible. This is really insightful (if you're not sure what that means, Google it). I really love these lines:
ReplyDelete- We had no clue of what we should have done. So we didn’t do anything
- and realised there were no sounds at all and it was just the sound of knowledge.
This is a really powerful piece of writing - did you get some help with this?
I need you to fix a small mistake in the second-last line - it should say:
So I just wondered what I'll do.
Great work Abbagale.
- Mr Mitchell
i didnt get any help at all i had used my brain and wrote it with my own words
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ReplyDeleteYou have given me an O..M..G.. moment.. this is really really really good. I do quite a bit of creative writing myself, have studied it at Uni etc... your stuff here is really good.. I enjoyed it.. thank you for sharing it with me, and well done!!!
Kia tau te mauri
Thanks and your welcome i love my amazing comments i get and im popular now publishing my work fb i need to have a look at it
DeleteWhat powerful imagery Abbagale, you really make the reader think about the challenges of learning new things.
ReplyDeletethank you miss ...
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